A story that I wrote

blackrose · 10-16-2006, 06:00 PM

I still don't think it is very good, but...*sigh* then again, I'm a profectionist. I don't think anything I do is good, becuase it isn't perfect. One of the flaws I have.

Anywho, it is a fantasy/supernatural/vampire/werewolf kind of story. So if you like those, feel free to read! Just go to Quizilla.com and search users for blackrose13459. I have four chapters out right now, but I'm planning on adding another one soon. I'm just doing some finnishing touches.
PM me to let me know what you think, if you read it.
Here is a portion of it:

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You gasped, your heart pounding violently, your hands shaking. You whirled around and you barely made out two faint glowing yellow eyes in the shadows. As the speaker stepped forward into the moonlight of the clearing, the body attached to the eyes slowly materialized before you. It was a young man, probably around eighteen or so. He was tall and built like a football player, so he seemed to take up a lot of space. You couldn’t make out any definite physical features because of the darkness, but it seemed he to have shaggy brown hair that swept around his chin. Overall he seemed to be just like a normal human.
But something was definitely wrong with him.
His eyes were a glowing pale yellow, reflecting the light of the moon. It reminded you eerily of how a dog’s eyes seemed to glow at night when you shined a light on them. Only these eyes seemed to be glowing from within. And where a human normally had whites around his eyes, this man’s eyes seemed to be all yellow.
As the fullness of the moonlight hit him, he buckled over, his back curving. He made a low moan and clutched his stomach. You didn’t know whether to go over to him and help him or to run away screaming. If he was sick and dying you wanted to help him, but what if he was the murderer? He fell to the ground and his body convulsed, twitching. He abruptly stopped twitching and he pushed himself up off of the ground with his….claws?
You stood frozen in place like a deer before the headlights of a speeding car as his body began to change. Slowly at first, then more rapidly, thick grayish fur began to sprout all over his body. It seemed to ripple over his body, moving in waves. He screamed as his knees rotated around in their sockets and he fell over onto all fours. His bones seemed to be moving around on their own accord, shrinking, breaking, rekniting, and moving to form the shape of a wolf. His hands grew calluses on them and formed into paws, the claws lengthening.
He looked up at you and you stared back into the eyes of a wolf. But this was no ordinary wolf. This was a human who had just turned into a wolf…a werewolf. A cold chill settled into the pit of your stomach as you looked at him, it, whatever it was, in the eye. You realized that you weren’t going to be able to get away from him, that you were going to die.
The werewolf bared its teeth and snarled, sending flecks of spit flying off into the darkness. It slowly advanced towards you, its eyes never leaving yours. There was no hint of anything human in those yellow eyes; it was purely beast.
You tried not to let out a scream, that would probably only excite it more....

That is from the 2nd chapter. lol I think that part was one of the funnest to write. lol

puPyluvr111 · 11-18-2006, 06:02 PM

Wow! I may be alone in posting what I think, but I thought that was really good!!!

sobreeze · 11-18-2006, 07:35 PM

hey that was realy great keep up the good work let us know when finished i would like a book

blackrose · 11-19-2006, 01:20 PM

Visit www.quizilla.com, search blackrose13459 and then click on the Fangs in the Night story...I have around six chapters out so far.